Added: Nov 23, 2008
From: 2ruby202
Duration: 2:18
I've always been very embarrassed by this song because I think it's very obvious that it's the first one I ever wrote and also because as far as break up songs go it's rather insipid.Anyway, I was going to delete when I remembered something that Ron said (rhopen ... check him out) in one of his videos where he put an old poem to music and was embarrassed by the angst in the words but thought it was dishonest to change them because they represented what he felt at the time.So I realised that the reason this song lacks guts is because when this particular event occurred, I was a few weeks away from giving birth to our child and it had been a horrible, horrible year. I simply had no fight left in me.So I decided to try and resurrect it instead but I'm not sure if my clumsy harmonies are making things worse :)This silence ... freezingCrystalline weapons form as you start speakingI brace myself for the stormbut it's more like a landslide, no warning, no formYou say I'm just your duty of care A responsibility too much to bearIt's crumbling from viewThe core of the man I once saw in youI hear you slam the doorYour words have me pinned to the floorAs their barbs sink their way inI tear them slowly from my hair and my skinSo you can't live a lieBut why oh why choose this way to say goodbyeSurely there's more to youThan this shell of the man I once thought I knewAnd I may be bruised ... confusedBut I know better, better than to fight for youAnd I should have knownMy reflection in your eyes disappeared long agoShe's welcome to youThis papier mache of a man I once knew
Channel: Music
Tags: acoustic folk guitar mache original papier song unsigned
Rating: 5.00 (25 ratings) Views: 296' favoriteCount='3 Comments: 25
jugnutgut Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Wow, I think a lot of writers only WISH they could be that embarrassing and insipid. :) You're a great writer and it started with this, your first song. And regarding what Ron said, I can totally relate.
sevenender Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - wonderfull more of thisoriginals are always better for meand you got a amazing voicegreetsender
soobajeaba Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - It's awesome!! It's great!!Thanks for putting it up...Beautiful!!It's amazing for being your first song!
hckeynut15 Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Wow! Very nice.Great job!- Jim
serenataorg Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - This is a song to be proud of. I don't think a song needs guts (in the sense that the story told has to be positive or inspiring), as long as you mean what you are singing. And it shows that you do.
rhopen Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Well, I for one am very glad you decided to keep it up becuase it's a very powerful song of loss and acceptance of it. This is not "pie in the sky" stuff, but it is also uplifting as well because that first step to healing has been taken. As a listener, I care about the protagonist in this song, and that makes it a great song. Too deep, sorry... haha, but I'm being sincere -Ron
davelovesmusic Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Beautifully sung, honest lyrics....this is a perfect original, just as it is. A song from the heart. This is music at its best.~David
stargate34 Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Very nice!
everreadyyy Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Another beautiful,honest song,a pleasure to listen to.The harmonies worked well btw.Cheers,Ed
duckscli Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - This is a super song, as are all of your originals. Great stuff.
goshajazz Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - i like your song a lot you're voice is beatiful and the words are very sincere and beatifull to
UncleUsurp Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - if only we all found it so simple to put true feelings te words...and then wrap them in an ear-pleasing voice..
TERUKO5 Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Very nice. And, again, great last verse! 5*****
SafetyChris Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - this is greatreally disarmingly clear harmoniesmagic
SafetyChris Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - anbsolutely cutting last linegeniusfaved
luvagirr9 Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - hey ruby love your new songs, especially when they're personal and coming from a real place. those songs that are raw and true are the best, to me anyways.
SafetyChris Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - I love this, your best one if you ask me (and you don't even like it!)
willy350z Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - You are just awesome!! Doing your own songs!!20GS!!::)) Will
hernameinlights Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - I really like the harmonies...and this song breaks my heartmx
fingercheese Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Nothing wrong with these lyrics....wonderful tune...
Tilly220 Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - This is absolutely stunning. Sends goosebumps. I found your channel through a series of jumps across channels- so glad I did. I'm faving this to play agin.
jonno52 Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Favourited. You should be proud of work like this, not embarrassed.
moondogg55 Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Though not as polished as some of your later work, it's not "insipid", or "gutless". In fact, I think you completely captured the pain, anger, and sadness of love dying. Your words nailed the despair, and the feeling of being 'frozen'.I think this is BRILLIANT! * * * * *
GYPSUMFANTASTIQUE Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - this is beautiful . i can tell it's heartfelt . the harmonies are haunting
xBattleGnomeGirlx Says:
Nov 23, 2008 - Don't be embarrassed!! It's awesome!!! Just as stewze said, im glad u put it up, and didnt change anything in it !! :) (sorry my english could be wrong, im german ^^)-Tami